Improving Motor Skills in Early Childhood through Goal-Oriented Play Activity

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You elaborate on a really interesting topic, especially in the covid19 era, where children were sitted all day in front of a screen.

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Play helps children to grow in every aspect, so it is a necessity to develop all necessary motor skills to facilitate children to play.

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I have to admit that I struggled to understand your paper. You need to rephrase almost everything in your paper in proper English.

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You must use more citations. For example, in the introduction (lines 31-35) you write about "common" parents and their beliefs about play.  First of all, what do "common" parents stand for? Secondly, where is the citation? Is there research that proves this belief?

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Why continuous play is active play? Children can play, without being active.

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And many, many things. They are all over your paper.

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You repeat your sample twice. At first, they are boys and girls and then males and females.

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You have incorporated in your intervention, activities that they are also items of your test. This is not intervention. This is training. In my opinion this a huge methodological issue. If your purpose was training, then you are safe. What is the case? Training, treatment or intervention? You know.

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Please, rewrite your paper. Read again your references, search for more, citate your paragraphs, rewrite your methods, link better your results with literature in your discussion.

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Thank you for giving me the opportunity to review your paper. Good luck.

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Line 56: while those who “are”

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Lines 61-62: Reword this sentence as it is unclear what is being said.  

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Line 69: Further, he “explains”

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Line 70: Play should not be capitalized.

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Line 75: Back part of this sentence needs to be reworded, used “and” twice without clear flow.

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Line 94: Two “hours” of active play?

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Lines 138-139: Manipulative skills definition needs to be more clearly worded.

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Lines 147-148: “John (34) motor”, this does not make sense, reword.

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Line 149: When citing research, the citation should come at the end rather than the beginning unless worded correctly.

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Line 154: Does not make sense starting at “Besides”?

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Line 269: continuous “play”

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Line 272: “Play” that “is” perceived

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Many of the wording in the discussion is almost complete repetition of the introduction. Writing needs to be more diverse and leading to a purpose instead of just restating information.

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Lines 277-278: The practice skills done can not be listed as games, as the intent of the tasks never had a game focus. Also, I question the definition of play and the structure of the intervention/program.

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Line 287-288: To state these skills learned will be lifelong permanent, research must be cited here. The data you provided does not back this statement.

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Line 344: Wasn’t this study more on psychomotor behavior or neuromuscular behavior rather than cognitive behavior?

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Lines 349-352: Continuous play as defined by this study?

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Provide more descriptive data in the results section (e.g., average scores for each category).

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The title states continuous play but the prescribed program implemented does not sufficiently fit the definition of continuous play. I would consider renaming the article.

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The literature review highlights the importance of play to decision making and problem solving, which is true. But the type of “play” that is done in this study would not drive those findings. This is much more of a controlled regimen than actual play. I am struggling with the definitions and the actual implementation. They do not seem to line up. It seems as though this is more of continuous motor skill tasks that then improve motor skills, which is important.

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The paper needs to be proofread for English grammar rules and flow. Many areas of the writing are choppy and there are a multitude of grammatical errors.

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The research does have value in providing a narrative that kids need to develop motor skills through movement, and they definitely can. But the wording and approach need to be adjusted to develop a more accurate and compelling argument.

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