Parent-Child Relationship, Well-Being and Home-Leaving during the Transition from High School to University
Narges Hadi
Round 1
Reviewer 1 Report
Comments and Suggestions for AuthorsI found the paper well articulated and compelling and wish the authors good luck
Author Response
We would like to thank the reviewer for the positive reception of our manuscript.
Reviewer 2 Report
Comments and Suggestions for AuthorsI really appreciated the paper, well written, with a good methodology and interesting results. The topic is new and it is well developed with a scientific soundness. Compliments top the authors.
Author Response
We would like to thank the reviewer for the positive reception of our manuscript.
Reviewer 3 Report
Comments and Suggestions for AuthorsAlthough it is true that the results could be different if they have been obtained in rural areas, and differentiating those participants who leave the home definitively from those who continue to return, I believe that this work contributes with valuable knowledge to the topic under study. It´s true that future research should preferably include additional assessments over a longer period, and parents, close friends, or romantic partners as respondents.
Author Response
We would like to thank the reviewer for the positive reception of our manuscript.
Reviewer 4 Report
Comments and Suggestions for AuthorsOverall a very important research in the area of Emerging Adulthood. The authors should be congratulated for exploring numerous constructs under the theme of Emerging Adulthood in a Turkish cultural context. A few things may improve the quality of the paper.
On p.1, in the introductory sentence since you mention 'young people going through profound changes...' please name and briefly elaborate on the other profound changes (before launching into the subject of leaving home).
On p.3 the second sentence in the first paragraph ";;;their children who lives with them...", please change from 'lives' to 'live'.
On p.3 the eighth sentence in the second paragraph "...differ to what extend..."please change 'extend' to 'extent'. Sentence 13 in the same paragraph "students cannot find an accommodation..." please delete 'an'.
On p.3 paragraph three, the third sentence where it says "...the highest third percentage..." please rephrase to 'the third highest percentage'. For sentences 6 & 8 in the same paragraph the in-text referencing should be corrected by removing 'one-in-third' and 'one-in-fourth'. The brackets should only contain the names of authors and year(s).
The last sentence on p.3 "...which indicates that it is culturally acceptable..." I think the word 'suggests' might work better.
On p.4 paragraph one, sentences 9, 11, and 13, please remove 'i.e.,' from the the in-text references. I don't think they are necessary but if you want to use them they should be outside the brackets.
In the first sentence of the last paragraph on p.4 "To what extend...' please change to 'extent'.
In the same paragraph you mention the formulation of six hypotheses. Can you please make these more clear to the reader, may be in dot-point form.
On p.5 paragraph 4, sentence number 4, please delete 'i.e.,' from the the in-text reference.
On p.6 please ensure that you delete all the extra insertions in the in-text references besides the the names of the authors and years.
Finally in the ninth sentence of the conclusion paragraph "...our results are interesting for university...." May be change that to 'our results may be useful to ...'
All the best
Comments on the Quality of English Language
Overall a very important research in the area of Emerging Adulthood. The authors should be congratulated for exploring numerous constructs under the theme of Emerging Adulthood in a Turkish cultural context. A few things may improve the quality of the paper.
On p.1, in the introductory sentence since you mention 'young people going through profound changes...' please name and briefly elaborate on the other profound changes (before launching into the subject of leaving home).
On p.3 the second sentence in the first paragraph ";;;their children who lives with them...", please change from 'lives' to 'live'.
On p.3 the eighth sentence in the second paragraph "...differ to what extend..."please change 'extend' to 'extent'. Sentence 13 in the same paragraph "students cannot find an accommodation..." please delete 'an'.
On p.3 paragraph three, the third sentence where it says "...the highest third percentage..." please rephrase to 'the third highest percentage'. For sentences 6 & 8 in the same paragraph the in-text referencing should be corrected by removing 'one-in-third' and 'one-in-fourth'. The brackets should only contain the names of authors and year(s).
The last sentence on p.3 "...which indicates that it is culturally acceptable..." I think the word 'suggests' might work better.
On p.4 paragraph one, sentences 9, 11, and 13, please remove 'i.e.,' from the the in-text references. I don't think they are necessary but if you want to use them they should be outside the brackets.
In the first sentence of the last paragraph on p.4 "To what extend...' please change to 'extent'.
In the same paragraph you mention the formulation of six hypotheses. Can you please make these more clear to the reader, may be in dot-point form.
On p.5 paragraph 4, sentence number 4, please delete 'i.e.,' from the the in-text reference.
On p.6 please ensure that you delete all the extra insertions in the in-text references besides the the names of the authors and years.
Finally in the ninth sentence of the conclusion paragraph "...our results are interesting for university...." May be change that to 'our results may be useful to ...'
All the best
Author Response
Overall, a very important research in the area of Emerging Adulthood. The authors should be congratulated for exploring numerous constructs under the theme of Emerging Adulthood in a Turkish cultural context. A few things may improve the quality of the paper.
We would like to thank the reviewer for the valuable suggestions.
On p.1, in the introductory sentence since you mention 'young people going through profound changes...' please name and briefly elaborate on the other profound changes (before launching into the subject of leaving home).
We thank the reviewer for this suggestion. We have modified this sentence to:
“Transition to university is a critical period during which young individuals go through profound changes such as making new friends, having more freedom and more responsibilities, and potentially leaving home for the first time (Arnett, 2000).”
On p.3 the second sentence in the first paragraph ";;;their children who lives with them...", please change from 'lives' to 'live'.
We changed ‘lives’ to ‘live. Now, the sentence reads as:
“While parents provide some sort of protection for their children who live with them, over time they may feel overburdened by commuting to university and handling daily re-sponsibilities (Christie, 2007).”
On p.3 the eighth sentence in the second paragraph "...differ to what extend..."please change 'extend' to 'extent'. Sentence 13 in the same paragraph "students cannot find an accommodation..." please delete 'an'.
We change ‘extend’ to ‘extent’ and deleted ‘an’.
“In high school, adolescents already differ to what extent they are motivated to leave home after they graduate (Akın et al., 2021).”
“Furthermore, nowadays due to housing shortages and increasing rent in many countries, students cannot find accommodation and are thus forced to stay at home and commute to university.”
On p.3 paragraph three, the third sentence where it says "...the highest third percentage..." please rephrase to 'the third highest percentage'. For sentences 6 & 8 in the same paragraph the in-text referencing should be corrected by removing 'one-in-third' and 'one-in-fourth'. The brackets should only contain the names of authors and year(s).
We thank the reviewer for this comment. We have deleted all extra insertions used with in-text references. Now all the in-text references contain the names of authors and year(s) in parentheses.
“With the value of higher education increasing over the past few decades, today almost half (44.4%) of the young adults (20-24 years old) in Turkey are university students, which is the third highest percentage among European countries (Eurostat, 2021).”
“Close to the prevalence rates in Western societies (Auerbach et al., 2018), one-in-fourth of Turkish university students have moderately high levels of clinical depression (Arslan et al., 2009), especially for those coming from low SES than mid-high SES families (Bayram & Bilgel, 2008).”
The last sentence on p.3 "...which indicates that it is culturally acceptable..." I think the word 'suggests' might work better.
We changed the word ‘indicates’ to ‘suggests’ and now the sentence reads as:
“Regardless, Turkey has the highest percentage of university students living in student housing among European countries (Hauschildt et al., 2021), which suggests that it is culturally acceptable to leave home for university.”
On p.4 paragraph one, sentences 9, 11, and 13, please remove 'i.e.,' from the the in-text references. I don't think they are necessary but if you want to use them they should be outside the brackets.
We deleted all ‘i.e.,’ from the references.
In the first sentence of the last paragraph on p.4 "To what extend...' please change to 'extent'.
We change ‘extend’ to ‘extent’
“2. To what extent are changes in parent-child relationship quality and well-being associated with each other?”
In the same paragraph you mention the formulation of six hypotheses. Can you please make these more clear to the reader, may be in dot-point form.
This suggestion was also made by the editors. Above we added the updated text including the numbered hypotheses listed on page 4 and 5 of the manuscript.
On p.5 paragraph 4, sentence number 4, please delete 'i.e.,' from the the in-text reference.
We deleted all ‘i.e.,’ from the references.
On p.6 please ensure that you delete all the extra insertions in the in-text references besides the the names of the authors and years.
All extra insertions are deleted from the in-text references.
Finally in the ninth sentence of the conclusion paragraph "...our results are interesting for university...." May be change that to 'our results may be useful to ...'
We changed this sentence and now it reads as:
“Thus, our results may be useful for university staff and mental health professionals working with emerging adults in transitions, as well as parents who continue to be a source of support for their emerging adult’s well-being.”
Reviewer 5 Report
Comments and Suggestions for AuthorsI found the manuscript to be engaging. While you present substantial support for the study, a more compelling rationale for the study's importance is warranted. Merely stating that there is limited research with a longitudinal design is insufficient. A more comprehensive explanation is needed to underscore the significance of investigating this study.
Furthermore, in the discussion section, you note that autonomy support from fathers and the stress levels of young individuals decreased over time. It would enhance the discussion to incorporate gender differences, particularly in comparison to previous studies. Providing insights into how mothers and fathers differ based on existing literature would enrich the narrative, allowing a nuanced understanding of how this study either aligns with or challenges these established gender-related findings.
Comments on the Quality of English LanguageI found some minor gramatical errors
Author Response
I found the manuscript to be engaging. While you present substantial support for the study, a more compelling rationale for the study's importance is warranted. Merely stating that there is limited research with a longitudinal design is insufficient. A more comprehensive explanation is needed to underscore the significance of investigating this study.
We thank the reviewer for this suggestion. We revised the first paragraph on page 1, which gives the rational for our study’s importance. Now, the emphasis is more on examining changes in parent-child relationship and well-being together in transition to university, while also investigating the impact of home-leaving on these changes in non-Western participants. The end of this paragraph now reads as:
“Therefore, the transition to university requires special at-tention with respect to parent-child relationship and young individuals’ well-being. While ample research has focused on the transition to university, studies investigating familial relationship and well-being of young individuals simultaneously are lacking. As parents continue to play a key role during emerging adulthood, it is vital to investigate how parent-child relationships change and to what extent they are associated with the changes in well-being. Furthermore, most of the research on the transition to university has been conducted primarily in Western countries such as United States, United Kingdom and Australia (Fingerman et al., 2017; Patiniotis & Holdsworth, 2005; White, 2002). Research conducted in non-Western countries are needed in order to understand the unique experience of young individuals in culturally different contexts. The present study aimed to address these knowledge gaps in the literature by investigating changes in parent-child relationship quality and well-being prospectively in a non-Western country. Furthermore, this study aimed to investigate the association between these changes and the impact of home-leaving on these changes in Turkey.”
Furthermore, in the discussion section, you note that autonomy support from fathers and the stress levels of young individuals decreased over time. It would enhance the discussion to incorporate gender differences, particularly in comparison to previous studies. Providing insights into how mothers and fathers differ based on existing literature would enrich the narrative, allowing a nuanced understanding of how this study either aligns with or challenges these established gender-related findings.
We highly appreciate this suggestion. We have added a sentence comparing our finding with a previous study. The text now reads:
“Contrary to our expectations, autonomy support of fathers declined during this period. This was surprising since literature indicates that emerging adults are in need of more autonomy (Arnett, 2000), and parent-child relationships get more egalitarian in emerging adulthood (Lindell & Campione-Barr, 2017; Parra et al., 2015). This finding may align with one study (Whiteman et al., 2011) showing that parental acceptance reported by youth declines throughout adolescence and in the early years of emerging adulthood, yet in this study no difference between maternal and paternal acceptance was detected.”
